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Land less soul
By the sea
Are your worries
Cleansed away
Within the dusty tranquility,
of the moon
Do you lay,
reflecting on entrenched sorrows
There is no answer
In the rigid rocks
Only hollow echos
Ringing through, Where
Babel once stood firm
From formless clouds
Perpetuating life cycles
Peace is witnessed;
Truth is resurrected
Upon being left for dead
All things are words
Whispering secrets,
To your heart
By the sea
Are your worries
Cleansed away
Within the dusty tranquility,
of the moon
Do you lay,
reflecting on entrenched sorrows
There is no answer
In the rigid rocks
Only hollow echos
Ringing through, Where
Babel once stood firm
From formless clouds
Perpetuating life cycles
Peace is witnessed;
Truth is resurrected
Upon being left for dead
All things are words
Whispering secrets,
To your heart
...I hope it is understandable - if not I can elucidate
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the questions in this
are well placed
and your sense of renewal is lovely
are well placed
and your sense of renewal is lovely